Well, they are dangly bits. Dangling participles and dangling modifiers can push your readers over into a guffaw or simply ROFLTAO…ahem… At worst, not making your sentence clear can confuse the heck out of your readers. When you’re acting as your own proofreader, it can be difficult to discover these dangling confusions if only because you know in your own mind exactly what you mean to say. C.S. Lakin has done a couple of cute, short posts on dangling participles and dangling modifiers at which you should have a peek. Consider creating a checklist for yourself of difficult to remember confusions!
Month: May 2012
Moms can get taut when a tot is taught in this Word Confusion from KD Did It.
Black Dust Mambo by Adrian Phoenix Series: Hoodoo, 1 My rating: 5 of 5 stars First in the Hoodoo urban fantasy series revolving around Kallie Rivière. My TakeOh, wow! This was good!! I started reading and hated having to put it down. Within 20 pages, there’s more action than most novels achieve in 100. It uses the background of the nomads which Phoenix created in her The Maker’s Song series (starts with A Rush of Wings) with an emphasis here on voodoo. Phoenix also has a nice touch with the dialog and dialect in this story. The basic premise is revenge. The bad guy wants to punish the woman he believes is responsible for his wife’s death and his imprisonment for all those years. And he has no compunctions over who he uses or hurts to achieve his ends. In fact, the more hurtin’, the better… Phoenix sets us up early for [our] dying to read this book and the next, Black Heart Loa, with the mystery as to why Kallie’s mama would want to kill her own daughter. Gabi just needs to keep evil from coursing through Kallie, sparking whatever is inside her… Ooh-la-la…that Augustine has a bit of […]
Demon Bound by Meljean Brook Series: Guardians, 4 My rating: 4 of 5 stars Fourth in the Guardians paranormal romance series revolving around a group of former humans. People who sacrificed themselves to save another. The couple focus in this story is on Alice and Jake. My TakeI had a difficult time getting involved in this story for about the first third, but I finally got involved and couldn’t put it down. This is the first time a Guardian has gone back to visit family and we eventually find out why it was so easy. There’s also a major reveal about Michael! Quite, quite shocking..! I certainly never saw it coming…ever. We also discover more about the origins of the nephilim and just why it is that Lucifer wanted them out of Hell. As well as Brook’s interpretation of how redemption works. Then, there’s the truth behind the fountain’s depth. Never saw that one coming either. The one loose thread is just how Zakril was betrayed when his so-called betrayer was already imprisoned… Then there’s the weak point with Anaria at the end. I don’t know if it was just Jake lashing out or… Brook drew out the “tease” on […]
Vampire Sunrise by Carole Nelson Douglas My rating: 3 of 5 stars Third in the Delilah Street, Paranormal Investigator urban fantasy series set in Las Vegas. My TakeWhy, oh why, does Delilah keep going on about the Brimstone Kiss she shared with Snow?? Nothing happened. Supposedly. So why…are we being tortured over this? So, somehow, the Brimstone Kiss from Snow has evolved into the Resurrection Kiss and it’s that which revived the almost-dead Ric? Can you say “drama queen”? Douglas writes this entire story at such extremes of the dramatic angle, it makes me want to barf. Ooh, “bridal suite turns into predawn death trap”. I should be so lucky. Ooh, I wanna live in the Enchanted Cottage! Complete with ghostly maid service!! Nasty…Delilah falls into Ric’s dreams and learns about his childhood history. Omigod…can we stretch this even further…?? Delilah’s concerned because her CSI twin, Lilith, and her own name ALMOST spells “death”. Yup, I bet it could almost spell all kinds of things. And then Douglas goes off on some weird segue about Cesar’s 1940s mistress Vida and how her name can be re-arranged to spell…oh, no…”Diva”!! What the point is…I haven’t a clue. Well, it’s one way […]
Devil’s Punch by Ann Aguirre Series: Corine Solomon, 4 My rating: 3 of 5 stars Fourth in the Corine Solomon urban fantasy series revolving around a touch psychic living in Mexico. My TakeI was enjoying the promise of Corine and Chance together again, building a life. Then Aguirre comes along with this kidnapping. Okay. Obviously, a new story needs a new bit of drama. And it’s good for a while, but then Corine is making all these stupid decisions, just rushing on in without thought. One word sums it up…drama queen. It’s certainly an interesting journey into Hell. Then there are the distinctions the demons themselves make between each other. Oh brother…the whining begins. Up to this point, Corine has been a pretty courageous and intelligent person. She knows it’s the Chasm of Despair…hullo. So she just spills everything. And I mean…everything. Idiot. Corine’s interactions with Sybella and her escape are just too easy. There’s a shallowness in this story that is irritating. Almost like taking a ride through Disneyland. This should be such an important chapter in Corine’s life and…phfft. Xibalba is the, well, I guess capital city of Sheol, and it certainly sounds pretty. It has its range […]
The Calling by Kelley Armstrong Series: Darkness Rising, 2 My rating: 5 of 5 stars Second in the Darkness Rising urban fantasy series for young adults revolving around the St. Cloud cabal’s townful of experiments in Salmon Creek on Vancouver Island. In The Gathering, Armstrong dropped the bomb which tied Salmon Creek with the events and characters in the Darkest Powers series (be sure to read Summoning, Awakening, and then Reckoning before starting this series—if you’re OCD like me about the chronology. It isn’t necessary to read it, but you’ll experience a bit more fear if you do! My TakeI just love what Armstrong does with her series for young adults. She’s not condescending to her readers, instead she simply writes a good story with tension and drama and a good dose of excitement. This particular story simply tidies up what flared up at the end of The Gathering, although Armstrong still has us wondering at the end of The Calling. This has more the feel of a bridge novel and, I hope, will make the connection in The Rising when it’s published, hopefully, in 2013. It’s an amazing journey and one on which the kids learn a great deal […]
The Outlaw’s Tale by Margaret Frazer Series: Sister Frevisse, 3My rating: 5 of 5 stars Third in the Sister Frevisse historical mystery series set outside Oxfordshire in medieval England. The stories revolve around Dame Frevisse, a highly intelligent nun. My TakeThere’s a familial up-and-down in this story as Dame Frevisse encounters her long-lost cousin Nicholas who is hoping for her help. Dame Frevisse is truly a saint. I’would’ve left Sister Emma on her own. She is that incredibly irritating. A self-obsessed, whiny idjit with a stream-of-conscious chatter that is totally non-stop. It’s the beating Beatrice suffers that inclines me toward the ill-wish against Nicholas. How could he not have considered the effect of his robbery? Evan certainly tried hard enough to stop him. But, what really caps it is Nick’s response to Beatrice. The story certainly goes to show that fraud and embezzlement are part of the human condition just as, on the positive side, compassion is as well. The StoryIt’s a kidnapping with a ruthless purpose underlying it for all the concern “Robin and his Merry Men” project when Sister Emma falls ill. Luckily, one of Nicholas’ business partners lives nearby and is able to take the sisters in. […]
Rainshadow Road by Lisa Kleypas Series: Friday Harbor, 2 My rating: 5 of 5 stars Second in the Friday Harbor romance series revolving around the Nolan brothers. The couple focus is on Sam Nolan and Lucy Marinn. My TakeI do love reading Kleypas’ stories. There’s such a homeyness to them with the requisite happily ever after. Even if I do wanna smack Lucy’s parents up one side and down the other. Although, shockingly (truly!), the Marinns actually do the unexpected! Justine makes a great statement: “Life is a banquet, and you are both wandering around with chronic indigestion” Then the flip side is Sam’s assessment of a past relationship in which the girlfriend’s idea of getting married: “sounded like someone throwing a roll of paper towels and a can of frosting in an oven and saying, ‘You know, I think there’s a good chance this is going to turn into a chocolate cake.’ “ Kleypas provides some back history on the Nolan brothers’ childhood. Oh, boy. Fred and Mary Harbison were the closest Sam had to real parents and their deaths opened up a great opportunity for him. I can’t stand that sister. I desperately hope that the next in […]
Those famous last words…”I won’t be fooled again”… And Coyote dupes Atticus into battling desert skinwalkers in payment for that faked death under the Arizona sun.